Saturday, March 12, 2011

Prised Penury-To Have Loved And Lost

This poem is on the winner's list of The Poetry Contest-Women And Blogging at Blogjunta on 28-3-2011.

A boy came running to me on a lonely road
No tale is this like of the princess and toad
And I believed him not...
A fistful of some candies and marshmallows 
He filled in my pocket, the kindest of fellows
And I thanked him not...

A game good of hopscotch then we played
Each step of mine he watched as I strayed
And I noticed him not...
A bunch of blossoms red to make me smile
He plucked from the meadows across the rile
And I praised him not...

A breeze chimed as he hummed in the air
My songs favorite, like a bird from his lair
And I heard him not...
A love so selfless, splendid, sublime and serene
With a dream he brought,to me no real did it mean  
And I wanted him not... 

A dame another I saw holding him lest he would fall
They strolled away, I realized it was too late to call  
And I deserved him not....
A world now asks me "How does it feel in the end?"
All I go tell them "I loved myself and lost a friend"
And now"I love him a lot!"

-R-


PS 1: This Post has been Published as a part of  BlogJunta- Women and Blogging

PS 2:If these lines touched you,fav it here.

PS 3: Before anyone else begins to probe or surmise,please note the essence of the poem is real but imaginary,you know what I mean;-)

30 comments:

Raghu said...

Nice one..:-)
Is it ur story..? ;-)

Raksha Bhat said...

@Raghu: Fiction my dear,nothing personal:-)I wouldn't be sitting like that watching him;-)Thanks for reading!

Nandita Prakash said...

hey lovely words
can relate absolutely
happened wid me as well
usually happens wen u r too small to understand the effect ur ignorance can create
cheer up sweety
wid such lovely words the world around is embracing u with lots of love & real praise

Raksha Bhat said...

@Nandita Prakash:Awww you are sweet!:)You read between the lines,don't you?But luckily I have not met a boy of this kind yet:)Thanks a ton though:)

Sameera said...

What a lovely poem!!

LOve the PS too :P

K said...

Wonderful... A very vivid picture you paint.. I am going searching back to your older poems now.. A very unique rhythm...

raji said...

Lovely poem.I learned a new word today"Penury"-extreme bareness ,nice..
I liked the ps 2.:))Even if it was your life story..it was a good decision.

subtlescribbler said...

wonderfully penned :) Its got an innocence and sweetness about it that u don't seem to be a culprit of breaking his heart! the ending was extremely cute too...good luck :D


sarah

Raksha Bhat said...

@Sameera: I knew you would love it;-)

@K: Welcome to the blog girl:)Thanks for liking the poem:)It feels double nice when a friend likes what I write:)


@raji: Haha..poetic word for poverty precisely that is:)Thanks for reading:)

@subtlescribbler: Thanks Sarah:)

zephyr said...

Nice feelings and an apt pic. Loved the look on the little girl's face!

Raksha Bhat said...

@zephyr: Hey welcome to the blog:)Thanks for liking:)

Someone is Special said...

Raksha, it touched my heart, and so I FAV IT.. here is mine, to have loved and lost

Someone is Special

Raksha Bhat said...

@SIS: Thank you,glad it did:)

The twenties girl said...

Very beautiful.. I loved it... ATB..

Raksha Bhat said...

@The twenties girl: Thank you girl:)

Hayaah said...

I <3 the look of your nest here... its beautiful and bright, and all things nice! If that weren't enough, your words touched a vein deep...

¬ poignant! I wish time on my end were more permitting to come around and read more often... Insha'Allah, I'll try and be around for more reading pleasures, I hope :)

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

no regret,
this helps,
moving tale, keep loving.

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

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simply visit me for details...all submissions are to be represented by the end of the week.
Happy Writing.
Looking forward to seeing you share your talent with us.
You rock.
xx

Md. Muddassir Shah said...

half the times people write what they feel. I pray to god you haven't had the bad luck to go through these feelings.

I suggest you change your career from doctor to a writer

very well written

Raksha Bhat said...

@Hayaah:I am touched,thank you:)

@Promising Poets Parking Lot: Thank you for reading...will visit your place soon:)

@Md.Mudassir Shah: I do not want to do that...I shall be both and I belong to the other half by the way;)Writing what you not feel is all the more difficult:)I like the challenge it throws:)Thank you for liking this poem:)

shruthi said...

Beautifully written ... Loved it.

Butterflies of time said...

Beautiful one Raksha! Truely deserving the Top position, Congratulations on winning BlogJunta's Poet Number 1.award.

Raksha Bhat said...

@shruthi:Thank you so much shruthi:)welcome to the Canary's Diary:)

@Butterflies of time: Thank you so much,congrats to you as well:)

Jingle Poetry said...

re you?

thrilled to see you win the contest.

come join poetry potluck today, your are missed if you don’t.

Happy Monday,
Bless your talent.

xxx

Raksha Bhat said...

@Jingle Poetry: Thank you so much:)I am quite new to these poetry forums...will hop in and write an entry by this evening for sure:)thanks for the invite:)

The Fool said...

You have made it really interesting and not unnecessarily got too sentimental. Quite an easy read. Congrats on winning the contest.

coolkamikazecat said...

A cool post.....this generally what happens with childhood crushes :) They are better left as that with an air of mystery....about what cud've/ wud've - than followed.....

Congrats on the win!

Raksha Bhat said...

@The Fool: Uneasy feelings in simple words is the hardest thing to write...glad this came out well:)Thank you for reading:)


@coolkamikazecat:Haha...I wonder why they call the love that blossoms as crushes:)thank you so much for reading:)

Shinymist said...

Hey Raksha .great poem .Loved it

Raksha Bhat said...

@Shinymist: Thank you so much for liking:)